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You applied for a merit-based scholarship three weeks ago. The committee was supposed to announce decisions last week, but you have not received any notification. You want to inquire about your application status.

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Submitted: Apr 10, 2026, 06:46 PM

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Estimated TOEFL · Writing

19/ 30
Intermediate
0152230
Rubric3.0/5

Key Takeaway

The email effectively communicates the applicant's interest and inquiry about the scholarship status.

Spelling errorsModerate

scholorship

Fix·Correct spelling to 'scholarship'.

Vagueness in expressionModerate

this could change you future.

Fix·Clarify the impact by saying, 'this scholarship could significantly impact my future career opportunities.'

Polite tone

I hope yo're doing well, and I apologize for disturbing you.

This polite introduction sets a respectful tone, which is important for formal communication.

Expresses interest

I am really interested in this scholorship and this could change you future.

Clearly expressing interest in the scholarship demonstrates motivation and commitment, which are valued by selection committees.

Inquiry about timeline

I wonder if the merit list is finalized and ready? If not, is there any timeline you can share with me?

This inquiry shows initiative and a proactive approach to understanding the status of the application.

Vocabulary & Flow

Repetitive Words
scholorship2x
awardgrant

Grammar Corrections

1 items found
yo'reyou're

Contraction error

Email Structure

Greeting

The greeting is present but contains a spelling error in 'Committe'.

Dear Committe member, I hope yo

Opening Paragraph

The opening paragraph sets the context and purpose well, but could be more concise.

Body Content

The body addresses all requirements but could benefit from more detailed elaboration.

Closing Paragraph

The closing expresses gratitude, which is positive, but could include a more specific call to action.

Sign-off

The sign-off is appropriate and maintains a professional tone.

Regards

Suggested Academic Phrases

I am eagerly awaiting your responseThis opportunity aligns perfectly with my academic goals

Improvement Roadmap

High Impact

Enhance clarity and professionalism by correcting spelling and grammar errors.

Now: scholorship

Try: scholarship

Correct spelling improves clarity and professionalism, potentially boosting the score.
Quick Wins

Use more precise language to describe the impact of the scholarship.

Where: body

Try: This scholarship could significantly impact my future career opportunities.

Polish

Incorporate linking words to improve the flow of the email.

Try: Furthermore, I am eager to contribute to the academic community.