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Genetic Engineering in Agriculture

134 words
Submitted: Apr 10, 2026, 07:00 PM

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Estimated TOEFL · Writing

14/ 30
Basic
0152230
Rubric2.0/5

Key Takeaway

The response addresses the topic of GMOs but lacks depth and specificity in its arguments.

Lack of specific examplesCritical

They could potentially raise mortality rate in the general population by causing mysterious adverse effects.

Fix·Provide specific studies or examples that illustrate potential health risks associated with GMOs.

Vague conclusionModerate

Overally, use of GMOs is controversial and we should focus more research toiwards traditional ways.

Fix·Conclude with a more specific recommendation or a summary of key points discussed.

Acknowledges potential risks

we are not certain about the long term side effects of these synthetic seeds

This demonstrates awareness of the complexity and potential risks associated with GMOs, which is important for a balanced discussion.

Considers ethical implications

artificial seeds are also controlled by by big firms and they control the prices in a very unethical way

Highlighting ethical concerns adds depth to the argument and shows consideration of broader societal impacts.

Acknowledges opposing views

On the other hand student 1 expressed a valid point that it can produce high yield

Recognizing opposing viewpoints demonstrates engagement with the discussion and a willingness to consider multiple perspectives.

Vocabulary & Flow

Linking Wordsgood
AsIn additionFor exampleOn the other handhowever

Continue using transitional phrases to improve the flow of ideas.

Repetitive Words
big3x
largemajorsignificant

Grammar Corrections

1 items found
envirnment destructionenvironmental destruction

Spelling error

Suggested Academic Phrases

ethical considerationslong-term ecological impact

Improvement Roadmap

High Impact

Incorporate specific evidence or examples to support claims.

Now: They could potentially raise mortality rate in the general population by causing mysterious adverse effects.

Try: Studies have shown that certain GMOs can lead to health issues, such as allergies or resistance to antibiotics.

Providing concrete evidence will strengthen arguments and improve the score.
Quick Wins

Correct spelling errors to improve clarity.

Where: body

Try: environmental destruction

Polish

Use varied vocabulary to avoid repetition.

Try: Instead of 'big firms', use 'large corporations' or 'major companies'.